Here is the first line of my novel - Grey Angel.
The water was searing cold.
What is your initial reaction?
Yes, I have had feedback from several beta readers. And yes, some of them have asked if 'searing' doesn't imply hot not cold. Searing is defined as extremely hot or intense. I have considered using a less forceful word. But I am resisting the change because the juxtaposition does get nearly every reader thinking - just how cold is searing cold? So cold that it burns?
I won't make you wait for the whole first paragraph, here is the next line.
The water was searing cold.
At 5 a.m. no one had drunk from the silver metal fountain for hours,
the
water had taken on a throat-numbing chill.
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